Feedback from the 1st Draft

After handing in our first draft and showing it to both our teachers it was clear that much more work was needed to be done. They gave us great constructive feedback for improving our ideas and films. After they saw the first draft they botht hought that there wasnt enought to the story; and it seemed all pretty random. Another majour problem we encountered was the transistion from the station to the school toilets was far too obvious and it broke many rules of continuity. So after getting this feedback we re-grouped and re-thought through the story and came up with some more ideas to improve the idea. We then made another apointment with South west trains to film at the station and again and began improving our film. This time we would add more story into the whole opening and also film the toilet scene at the train station toilets, which would help the flow of continuity massively.